Our Glass

 

Was there a clock in the room? I seem to recall
seeing one on the wall, and yet no noise,
no sound of a tick, just the rise and fall
of your chest as we fit, inside
and around, all four feet
on the ground,
while the time
went so
quick.

Still,

no tick

tock

Was there a clock?

 

 

 

 

Posted for the wonderful One Shot Wednesday at the One Stop Poetry blog.

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19 Comments

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19 responses to “Our Glass

  1. so lost in you i never even noticed…smiles. nice one shot…

  2. Very neat and articulate, with a warmth of sensuality to counterbalance. A pleasure to read, as always.

  3. Very concise Carys, the cheeky little tick tock makes me think what ‘was’ going on in that room. I’m hoping you were lost in conversation…;)

  4. dustus

    Love the innuendo and the fact that it can be interpreted in different ways based on the sounds in the wordplay. Excellent

  5. Agree with all the comments here. Your work is always very smart, concise and layered. Loved this one. Gay @beachanny

  6. Best part is the title!!! Visual form is cool too! Love it.

  7. Brendan

    Poems are like dreams, they play loose with time and space. You capture the moment well which eluded time. Union does that — for a spell, at least.

    • ‘Poems are like dreams, they play loose with time and space’ – they do indeed. I like Charles Simic’s take on poetry – ‘Remember, a poem is a time machine you are constructing, a vehicle that will allow someone to travel in their own mind, so don’t be surprised if it takes a while to get all its engine parts properly working’.

      Brendan, I’ve tried unsuccessfully to visit your blog, has it moved?

  8. Well done. The timeless moments of love!

  9. you are very clever my friend…a great poem…pete

  10. Thank you Pete, I’m really enjoying the One Shot Wednesdays, although so great many poems….so little time….I need someone to perfect the cloning technique 😉

  11. Effective, ‘leads one to other interesting ideas’ work.

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